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My Grandmother Descriptive Essay

I need help editing my descriptive paragraph. I just wanted to know if I have an errors in my punctuations that I need to fix and if it sounds alright?.

*punctuations are important, 8-12 sentences, and cannot use you,your,one, very,a lot, and things.

A PERSON I WILL ALWAYS REMEMBER

A person I will always remember is my grandmother, because she was an amazing person I have ever known. My grandmother was a person everyone wanted to be around, she always put a smile on our face without even trying. She had the funniest laugh and always was telling jokes which was probably the reason why we were always laughing! My grandma would put anyone before her no matter what the situation was even if it was out of her way she would be there to help us. She was very caring and always had a welcoming home for us; my cousins and I always liked staying with her on the weekends. My grandma was like my best friend I could talk to her about anything, and she knew exactly how to solve my problems. She also made the best turkey dressing and banana pudding, I always looked forward to Thanksgiving walking into her house smelling all the warm food she had waiting for us. I will always cherish all the memories I had with my grandma she raised me to be a better person and to look at things in a positive way. She was a strong, loving, caring, funny woman and had many things to give to others, that everyone that met her will cherish forever.

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A person I will always remember is my grandmother, because she was an amazing person I have ever known. ==> either "the most amazing person I have ever known" or simply "an amazing person."

My grandmother was a person everyone wanted to be around, she always put a smile on our face without even trying. ==> Everyone wanted to be around her, and she always put a smile on our faces without even trying.

She had the funniest laugh and always was telling jokes, which was probably why we were always laughing!

My grandma would put anyone before her no matter what the situation was, even if it was out of her way she would be there to help us.

She was very caring and always had a welcoming home for us; my cousins and I always liked staying with her on the weekends. ==> this sentence is fine for the most part.

My grandma was like my best friend I could talk to her about anything, and she knew exactly how to solve my problems. ==> also fine.

She also made the best turkey dressing and banana pudding, I always looked forward to Thanksgiving walking into her house smelling all the warm food she had waiting for us. ==> this should be two separate sentences.

I will always cherish all the memories I had with my grandma she raised me to be a better person and to look at things in a positive way. ==> also two separate sentences

She was a strong, loving, caring, funny woman and had many things to give to others, .

I'm not sure how this fits into your application holistically, but overall, I think the content is a bit weak. You talk about how great your grandma is, but that doesn't really say much about who you are as an individual. Also something to consider: My English teacher's stance on writing about relatives is that it can be difficult to do well just because anyone who reads it will have a knee-jerk reaction to compare them to his or her own relatives.

Just my input.

My Grandma (Personalities Essay)

The person affects my life the most, and also my only idol, my goal of living is my grandma. In the time when most Asian women did not dare to express themselves, to speak out what was on their mind, my grandmother did. Her rare personality was popular and highly respected among those who knew her. At that time women would not have good education, however everybody would turn to my grandmother’s wisdom to ask for help. She was smart and profound but yet vigorously caring and loving towards her family, relatives and friends. I was her favorite grandchildren, and as I got to stay with her the longest my childhood was actually full of her love and teachings. Whenever I feel down and helpless with my life, my grandmother has always been my motivation to get up and fight.


My grandmother grew up in a middle class family, not wealthy but still considered intelligentsia. Her grandfather was a general in the last Vietnamese dynasty but the following generation was a downturn. Women at that time were not allowed to go to school; the only education they could get was from their own family. My grandmother managed to learn how to write and read, do simple mathematics and poetry mostly by herself because she was aware of the importance of being educated. However her wisdom came from all the ups and downs she had gone through in life, the downfall of her family, the gambler and unfaithful husband and the death of one of her two sons. She had been through all the obstacles and deprivations that could ever happen to a woman, and she still stood strong and helped her family keep moving on. If it had not been to her sharp decision where to go, and what to do my family would not survive the Vietnam War. She parted her kindred into small groups and sent each to different locations so that even one group should get in danger the others had the option to run away in time. It has never been easy to keep such a large family in peace, when my grandfather had two wives, and eleven children, not to say grandchildren, other relatives and in laws. My grandmother herself had four children with him, two sons and two daughters in which one of my uncles passed away in his twenties. She remained calm and brave after her son’s death and even when my grandfather moved in to live with his second wife. She was the one to solve all the fights and arguments between the two families and the eleven children. If there were any divorce, debts, family troubles and such, my grandma would be the first one people turned to, even the second wife’s family. She always treated everybody equally and judge fairly; her resolutions were the life saving boat to our relatives. Without her my family has been on a downfall and now begins to disintegrate.


My mom sometimes questioned how life could be so unfair to my grandmother, such a courageous and kind person deserved much better. My grandma just smiled and said that was her fate. She could not choose what would happen to her, good or...

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